比如说你my fate, my death里的第一段：
It is hard for me to write down these sentence, but i must bear it. I go the bed last night, thinking, until the lights extinguished, until i fall into sleep, have a nightmare, and burst into waken up, thinking, i can feel i am dieing. I reviewed my life last night, these 21 years, everything happened everyday...
错误就不少啊
我试修改：
It is hard for me to write down these sentence, but i must bear the difficulty of doing it. i went to bed last night, thinking until the lights extinguished and i fall asleep. i had a nightmare and burst into wakening up, thinking. i could feel myself dying. i reviewed my life last night and in these 21 years everything happened everyday...
一个是语言错误
还有一个是语言习惯错误
不是说你e文一定要怎么怎么样
太多的错误人家根本读不下去啊
版主回复： (2004-1-21 15:42:7)
我觉得语法错误改了没问题,语言习惯还是不改比较好,比如,bear it 和 bear the difficulty of doing it是有很大的区别的,当时的情感完全体现不出来了,就像把诗改成白话一样 :_) 呵呵,其实与其修改以前的还不如抓紧时间天天进步学新东西去. 不过你帮我改好了我就做个没语法错误的pdf版本来 :)
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